Recursive Process

On the left is a rough draft of my first introduction paragraph from the first essay we wrote. On the right is my final introduction paragraph for the first essay. I didn’t state the essays or the authors in my first introduction paragraph, so I had a lot of revision to do. I took the advice from my peers from our peer review, and added in the authors and essays, and talked about them more. I introduced the essay and I talked about the main point of the essay. You can see in the left paragraph that I didn’t really have any clear point of where to start or where my essay was going to take me and what I was going to talk about. I reread the essay and got  a better understanding, and then I started to connect to it more. I wrote down my sentences and opinions and then reflected on what I wrote, and made any corrections that were clear to me. I also would make sure what I had was relevant to the main point of my essay, so that my readers weren't confused when reading it. My main revision processes were to reread and correct any errors, and make sure what I had was relevant and made sense. I made a lot of progress from my first introduction paragraph compared to my final introduction paragraph and all throughout my final draft. This is evidence from learning outcome number one because it shows my ability to approach writing in a recursive process, by revising my drafts.